Not bad, especially for your first try! Your animation could use some work though, but that's nothing a little practice can't fix! Also, in my personal opinion, I think you should use original audio instead of over used Family Guy audio. But that decision should be left up to you! Anyway keep practicing!
I think you should improve your detail in your animations and your jokes. For instance, i think you should at least make a walking cycle instead of sliding him across the beach like the floor was made of soap. As for the jokes, your heart is in the right place but all of the jokes in this flash has been done before, like a million times before. Just make sure you practice your art style more and practice making original ideas for jokes! Good luck!
Thanks Il keep that in mind
I have to say, you need to work a tad bit harder on these animations. The voice acting was fine but the animation is pretty bad, not to mention the joke wasn't even that funny. Just keep practicing and writing new material! You'll get there!
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